Longrock

[dragonlovr101]

Name: Longrock

Age: 35 moons

Gender: male

Clan: lunarclan

Rank: senior warrior

Pelt: greyish white

Eyes: amber

Other Appearance: a ear scar, from a rouge (See Storm) a long tail and body

Personality: loving, and cold at the same time

History: has battled many warrors rouges Ect. his big moment was a battle whith Storm a old rouge, this eared him his warrior name he has seved his clan for may years and will retire to the elder's den soon

Other: mate of Chrystalrose, I have nothing else to type

[ღFoxspiritღ]

You need to add more than three words to everything. You forgot to put the 'clan' on Lunarclan.

Put more description in his pelt like, are there any different colors, is it slightly tinted, it just needs something.

Other appearances: is he long? Lithe? Short? Slim? Does he have a long tail or sharp claws? It needs some addition.

Personality: is he gentle? Harsh? Cold? Friendly? Brave? Cowardly? You might try giving an example of when he exercised a piece of his character. Like in battle he fought courageously, or, he often plays with kits, his gentle character winning the hearts of many of his clan mates. Does he have many friends or is he mostly shunned?

History: sorry to be so shrewd, but, there is no such thing as no history unless he's a new born kit. You need to put at least something there.

[ღFoxspiritღ]

And don't forget to modify your signature.

[ღFoxspiritღ]

0_o..... How can Longrock be 12 moons, a new warrior and be a senior warrior at the same time?

[dragonlovr101]

I fixed it,

[ღFoxspiritღ]

ok, but don't forget to modify your signature.

[dragonlovr101]

I did and I'll add this guy when he gets approved